我的未来对我很重要。我已经受过良好的教育，对于一个31岁的人来说，我有大量的相关经验。我希望我的法律教育比我作为一名工程师能够产生更大的影响。再加上一个可以依靠的强大家庭，我相信我可以过上成功的生活。我最初的毅力和动力随着我克服的每一个障碍而更加强劲。我可以自信地说，法学院将是一个我喜欢的挑战，我计划用我的专业知识、热情、奉献精神和自律来面对这个挑战。作为单身母亲的经历证明了我有一种责任感，这是每个律师都必须具备的。【Pishko认为，这句关于Jackson的责任感是本段的重点，因此应删除本段前面的句子。他们让人从这个有力的句子中分心。】

激情和欲望是让我走到这一步的内在本能，是我赖以完成法学院学习的核心原因。同样，我在许多不同领域都表现出奉献精神，包括母性、就业、社区服务和教育。最后，我所有的经验都告诉我，自律对于下一个阶段是必要的。

【因为她正在申请法学院来转行，Jackson想在她的申请中传达一种目标感。“我想表明我的独特性，并且有一种方法可以解释我正在做的事情的疯狂。” Pishko认为Jackson的文章为就读法学院提供了强有力的论据。“在阅读了其个人陈述后，我很清楚这个人想做什么，我对她能够做到这一点充满信心。” Pishko说。】

英文原文

案例一：Waukeshia Jackson

I sat down today to write an essay which undoubtedly would have follow the same format tat you have seen a thousand times before, but after last night I don’t think that would really be appropriate.

All of my life my mother impressed upon me the need to go to college and get a degree. On March 15,1996 my life changed. My daughter was born. All of a sudden, I went from doing the “right thing” because of my mom’s direction of doing the “right thing” for my daughter and myself. As a child I watched my mother, forced to raise a family of four on her own, do whatever it took to encourage and support us. Now I realize she pushed me so hard so I wouldn’t repeat her struggles. Having a daughter in this day and age has a profound effect on a woman. We live in an age in which young women idealize Brittany Spears and Jessica Simpson. I want my daughter to look to me as a model for what she can become. Her birth only reaffirmed for me the drive I had and needed. She was born during spring semester of my fourth year in college, which made my last year in college a very demanding one. In addition to caring for my new born baby, I had school, homework, design projects, and exams. My daughter is the most beautiful person in the world to me. For the past nine years, spending time with her has been the single most important extracurricular activity in my life, and last year I was awarded for that.

I originally pursued a career in engineering because that it would be intellectually stimulating. I was right-it is. However, in an industry where new products and services are developed frequently achieving work/life balance has been no small task. Fortunately, budgeting time is one of my strengths. I work 50 to 60 hours every week. I manage several function groups within the company. I am also an active member of several professional organizations. Yet, I still manage to chaperone field trips and back-to-school dances. I attend every soccer game and gymnastics class. I attend all parent/teacher conference, school carnivals, and PTA meetings. Last night, my daughter told me how much she loved me and how happy she was that although I’m often busy. I never make a fuss about being with her when she wants me to be there. As she gave me a gentle kiss on the check, I was reminded how much she means to me.

It takes perseverance, drive and passion to rise above difficulties and a long-term goal always serves as a light at the end of seemingly never-ending tunnel. My goal is simple: intellectual environment. My life experiences have help me to appreciate the value of this goal, and I look forward to reaching it. My education and career are matriculating as per my plan. I have always dreamed of a way to marry my technical expertise with my business acumen. I am an accomplished Software Engineer. I possess a Bachler of Science degree in Electrical Engineering and a Master of Arts degree in Business Administration. The combination of these has afforded me opportunities to work with several Fortune 500 companies including IBM, SBC, and Applied Materials. Within these corporations, I have honed my skills by programming, project planning, scoping projects, and project management. Since the beginning of my career, my goal has been to be known and respected solely based on a reputation for producing excellent work. After receiving these experiences, I’m ready to endure the challenge of Law School.

I have seen the difference I could have the opportunity to make with a Juris Doctor. My goal currently is to pursue a career in patent law. I feel that my successful work experience and rigorous scientific training will allow me to debate with the best attorney. Since technology and law in this area are developing rapidly, I am also confident that this filed will be constantly challenging.

I especially want to attend Louisiana State University. Louisiana State University has an exceptional faculty, distinguished not only for its scholarship, but also for its commitment to teaching and curricular innovation. The school’s unusually low student/faculty ratio creates an intimate environment that foster the development of student/faculty relationship that could last a lifetime.

My future is important to me. I already have an excellent education, and I have a phenomenon amount of patient experience for a person of 31. I want my legal education make a bigger difference than I can as an engineer, coupled with a strong family to draw upon I cannot help but live a successful life. My initial perseverance ad drive has evolved with every barrier I overcome. I can confidently say that Law School will be a welcome challenge, one that I plan to face with my arsenal of expertise, passion, dedication, and discipline. My experience as a single working mother has proved me with a sense of responsibility which every lawyer must possess. Passion and desire are the internal instincts that have brought me this far in life, and are the core characteristics that I rely on to carry me through Law School. Similarly, I have displayed my dedication in many different areas, including motherhood, employment, community service, and education. Finally, all my experiences have taught me that discipline is necessary to the next level.

参考文章：

https://www.usnews.com/education/best-graduate-schools/top-law-schools/articles/2017-04-27/2-law-school-personal-statements-that-succeeded

撰稿：Ivy

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