成功申请法学院个人陈述案例及评论 案例二（下）

上一篇文章中，我们给出了一份真实的个人陈述案例的前半部分。今天，我们继续分享这篇案例。它是由哈佛法学院毕业生Cameron Dare Clark撰写的。

案例二：

我的母亲、牧师、政治家、教育家和朋友们在我的一生中一直唱着“我们终将战胜一切”。这么久以来，这句话让我变得温顺，耐心地等待着歌中预言的那个“总有一天”。 我的祖先，被扣在他们奴隶船的货舱里，为他们的孩子想象“有一天”。被解放的奴隶，摆脱了他们的枷锁，但没有摆脱贫困和文盲的束缚，他们祈求那“有一天”来祝福他们的后代。马丁路德金博士、帕克斯夫人、X先生和无数其他人努力实现这一使命，梦想着预言中的“有一天”可以实现。但还有更多工作要做。

【Clark说他想在他的文章中提到民权运动的悠久历史。“我真的很想把我的经历和我当时所做的工作放在一个更大的背景下。”他说。】

我不再认为“我们将战胜一切”是一首摇篮曲。赞美诗其实是战斗的呐喊。我不会再无所事事地等待“有一天”。我准备好用我得到的祝福来为边缘群体获得权利和自由。律师和法律学者为女性、有色人种、LGBTQ个人和残疾人等边缘人群做出贡献的最伟大的民权胜利者铺平了道路。

【因为Clark的写作风格非常富有诗意，Pishko认为，这篇文章往往比典型的个人陈述更具戏剧性。“他的风格比较抒情和情绪化。所以问题是，他需要改变吗？我对此持观望态度，但这是一个很好的问题。” Pishko说。总的来说，这篇文章有一种“写作天赋”，文章中最好的部分带有一种音乐的韵律。】

在哈佛法学院，我将准备加入这个行列，与全国领先的法律学者们一起学习。在过去的几个月里，我一直在关注哈佛法学院学生对Ferguson和纽约市事件的反应。我渴望加入一个与我一样热衷于利用法律为歧视受害者取得真正进步的法学院社区。拥有一直为社会最边缘群体进行发生的悠久历史，我相信哈佛法学院将训练我去支持和赋权有需要的社区。【Clark说在整篇文章中交替使用“我”和“我们”是一个有意识的选择，因为他想把他的个人努力描绘成集体斗争的一部分。】

 十二月的一天，我们的公民抗命行为结束了，钟声在两个酒吧响起。当我们站起来收拾东西时，我们打破了沉默，提醒每个人一个最基本的事实：黑人的生命很重要。

【Pishko认为，Clark的文章令人耳目一新的一点是，他很谦逊。 “他并没有真正写下他的成就或奖项，或者他在民权历史课程中的成绩。他写的是他关心的事情和他真正想做的事情。”】

英文原文

案例二：Cameron Dare Clark

At the intersection of 21st and Speedway, I lay on the open road. My leg grazed the shoulder of a young woman laying on the ground next to me. Next to her, a man on his stomach slowed his breathing to appear as still as possible. A wide circle of onlookers formed around the dozens of us on the street. We were silent and motionless, but the black-and-white signs affirmed our existence through their decree: BLACK LIVES MATTER.

On a rainy day this past December, my follow protesters and I momentarily transformed a bustling intersection on the University of Texas at Austin campus into a space of disruption. As I participate in the die-in, I thought of my initial reluctance to join the protest, fearing retaliation from the agitators who I was certain would arrive. I thought of the onlookers, those who supported me and those who questioned my resolve. I pondered the test that I would have to take minutes after the protest ended. But soon my mind turned to my role in a movement much bigger than any individual. I thought about my family, my friends, black people, all people of color, and white people. I thought about those who have fallen to the ground, never to stand up again. 

“ We shall overcome. We, the citizens of the United States. Ours, in the end, is a story of optimism. A story of achievement that is unique upon this earth.”

President Obama invoked the iconic protest song movement in his keynote speech at the 2014 Civile Right Summit. Attending the Summit-an event celebrating the 50th anniversary of the Civil Right Movement and policies to ensure the wellbeing of marginalized groups within the United States-was highlight of my undergraduate career. Leaders and former presidents spoke about the triumphs of the last half-century, but I was especially eager to hear President Obama’s reflections on the importance of Civil Rights legislation and litigation throughout our country’s history. President Obama concluded his address by applauding the work that has already been done, but challenging us to pursue further solution to the many issues we still face today.

“We shall overcome” has been sung to me throughout my life by my mother, ma pastor, politicians, educators, and friends. For so long, the words kept me docile, waiting patiently for that “someday” prophesied in the song. My ancestors, buckled into the cargo holds for their slave ships, imagined that “someday” for their children. Emancipated slaves, freed from their chains but not from the bondage of poverty and illiteracy, prayed for the gifts of that “someday” to bless their offspring. Dr. King, Mrs.Parks, Mr.X, and countless others work to realize that call, dreaming that the foretold “someday” was in reach. But there is more work to do.

I no longer consider “We Shall Overcome” to be a lullaby. The hymn now servers as a battle cry. I will no longer to wait idle for “someday”. I am ready to use the blessings I have been afforded to secure rights and liberties for marginalized groups. Attorneys and legal scholars have paved the way for some of the greatest civil rights victories for women, people of color, LGBTQ individuals and the disabled. At Harvard Law School, I will prepare to join the ranks by studying with the nation’s leading legal scholars. For the past months, I have followed the Harvard Law School student response to the events in Ferguson and New York City. I am eager to join a law school community that shares my passion for using the law to achieve real progress for victim of discrimination. With an extensive history of society’s most marginalized group, I believed Harvard Law School will thoroughly train me to support and empower communities in need.

Our act of civil disobedience that December day ended when the Tower’s bells rang out in two bars, hearkening half-past noon. As we stood up and gathered out belongings, we broke our silence to remind everyone of a most basic truth: Black lives matter.

参考文章：

https://www.usnews.com/education/best-graduate-schools/top-law-schools/articles/2017-04-27/2-law-school-personal-statements-that-succeeded

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